Having some trouble with wordplay?

Porfirio Cahall: I feel as if I was given a second chance. I know that sounds corny, but to my way of thinking, I knew it was my duty to raise them but I also felt that I would grow to know my son through caring for his kids. And it happened. Each step they took I saw him take, each word they uttered I heard him speak. And finally when they were fully grown, there in front of me I saw people who were part of him and part of me and all became right with this world.

Jonie Lauria: First off, it really depends on why she was not part of her son's life. If unavoidable, then shrug it off as irrelevant. however, if she had him taken away, for instance, then the word redeemed is particularly evocative. So:"The shortcomings in your son's life are sad, but unavoidable. Just take comfort in the fact that you're making up for it with the fine job you're doing raising his children!"or"True...you screwed up and it cost you the lion's share of your son's life you'll just neve! r get back. Still, you've certainly redeemed yourself with the wonderful job you're doing raising his kids!"Don't know how comfortably these two converse otherwise, so went a wee bit more colloquial in the second example!Hope this helps some...EDIT ADD:Well writ, granny, but in the woman's voice, not the close friend's, which was the request....Show more

Becky Mosena: "I think you`ve done a wonderful job of raising (John`s) children and I`m sure that if he was looking down he`d be so happy and grateful that they had the opportunity to live with you".....something along those lines depending upon the circumstances in the script.

Lewis Ranft: The answer I have to give you is the advice that is offered by all of the writing instructors who have taught me: write about what you know. Anything else will not ring true. Every person's experience is unique, and everyone's story is worth sitting down and telling, and everybody's story, told in their own words, is compelli! ng. If you have personal experience with the situation of inti! mately discussing the death of your own or a close friend's child, I encourage you to go for it. The words will already be in you; you just need to let them out. If you do not, you can only guess at an experience that cannot be otherwise described....Show more